Elevator Pitch No. 3

This is my script from my second elevator pitch below

Hi, my name is Cameron Hellstrom, and today I bring you the Quickstick. The Quickstick is a memory stick for your phone. The Quickstick can connect to devices through a high speed USB 3.0 connector and comes with adaptors for lightning port and micro USB; this makes it the fastest memory device compatible with iPhone and Android phones. The idea is to make transferring files, backing up, and creating more memory for your device as simple and quick as possible. You are able to easily transfer files from phone to phone, phone to computer, and computer to phone. There are many different uses for the Quickstick and therefore it is available in a variety of different memory sizes to meet your needs, from sharing small files to backing up multiple devices. Quickstick is available in many different colors and styles making customization a choice, not an option. Quickstick comes with customer service and technical support 24 hours a day in case anything happens to go wrong. Quickstick also comes with security. You can choose your own passcode so nobody is getting in, but you. Hop on board with memory stick of the future. Once again, I'm Cameron Hellstrom with Quickstick.


This is the script for my third elevator pitch below. Not a ton of revisions were made as my changes were mostly made during the presentation. You can find the video here

Hi, my name is Cameron Hellstrom, and today I bring you the Quickstick. The Quickstick is a memory stick for your phone. The Quickstick can connect to devices through a high speed USB 3.0 connector as well as a lightning port connector and micro USB adaptor; this makes it the fastest memory device compatible with both iPhone and Android phones. The idea is to make transferring files, backing up, and creating more memory for your device as simple and quick as possible. You are able to easily transfer files from phone to phone, phone to computer, and computer to phone. This will be the first device that can easily transfer files TO a phone. There are many different uses for the Quickstick and therefore it is available in a variety of different memory sizes to meet your needs, from sharing small files to backing up multiple devices. Quickstick is available in many different colors and styles making personalization fun and easy. Quickstick comes with customer service and technical support 24 hours a day in case you have any questions or concerns. Quickstick also comes with security. You can choose your own passcode so nobody is getting in, but you. Hop on board with memory stick of the future. Once again, I'm Cameron Hellstrom with Quickstick.

I did not not receive any feedback critiquing my second elevator pitch, however, there were some changes that I wanted to make after I finished my second attempt that I had the chance to change during this attempt. I wanted to change my energy during this attempt. My second attempt wasn't as good as my first in the way that I presented it. I also changed the script a tiny bit to be even more clear to my audience. The biggest change I made in my third attempt was my energy and tone of voice. I think this is my favorite attempt yet, but I could still improve. The only things that I think I need to improve upon would be to memorize the script so I can recite it without reading which will allow me to be more enthusiastic and emotional during the presentation and I also think the audio quality could be better which would also help with the enthusiasm because I think I was talking much louder than the recording makes it seem.